Comments on: Ch20-1: Search for Hope

By: Canuovea

Canuovea — Wed, 31 Aug 2011 08:23:57 +0000

I think, on looking at the comments, that Zazo’s reaction to Tsu’s markeddom makes perfect sense to me.

By: Canuovea

Canuovea — Wed, 31 Aug 2011 08:22:43 +0000

Proofing:

““They’re not use(d) to this. “

By: Aywren

Aywren — Sat, 06 Dec 2008 14:43:10 +0000

Hrm… that’s an interesting criticism, Gwinna. As the writer, I’ve felt like I’ve done everything I could since Zazo was first introduced to make a strong connection between Zazo and TsuYa — from the fact that she’s cared enough to consistently pull him out of danger… to how they fight together, travel together… even argue.

Now this might not seem like a lot on a normal basis. But for an Arweinydd with a standing and mindset like Zazo… well… allowing herself to be argued with just isn’t done by any normal person. An example is how she treats Kip in Wayrift… any lip from him and he gets a nasty backlash. The fact that she even ALLOWS TsuYa to RIDE her (and chooses to go on journeys with him where she acts as his mount)… that’s also not something normally done by high and mighty Arweinydd.

I do feel like I worked on building up to this point with the previous chapter: Desperate Flight http://www.dreigiau.com/ch19-8

Though many people may have been focused on TsuYa’s Marked transformation, note how frantic and desperate Zazo was to try to keep him there and save him. THIS is not something she would have done for someone that she didn’t deeply care about… I tried to make it speak volumes about her feelings for him.

It isn’t easy to write for characters like Zazo sometimes. She has a very erratic way of showing how she feels. Every subtle give-and-take between TsuYa (who is stand-offish) and Zazo (who is an Arweinydd learning emotion) has a much larger meaning to it.

By: Gwinna

Gwinna — Sat, 06 Dec 2008 08:58:18 +0000

Aw Zazo. I’m going to be annoying and critical, though, and say I kind of feel like there could have been more build-up in the story to make Zazo’s attachment to Tsu more plausible? Not that I don’t love those two to pieces. It just seems a little sudden. Maybe I just can’t fathom the emotions of a grumpy arweinydd?

By: Jenna

Jenna — Fri, 05 Dec 2008 19:47:58 +0000

*huggles Zazo despite the risk* All that bitterness isn’t good for anybody, especially someone who could fall to Chaos.

*huggles Zemi*
I demand that you get better!
*gives him magical cherry poptarts of healing*
What is life without the Zemicouch?

LOL SoYa! Keep practicing your ZenTo impersonation. You’ll get it down one day. xD

By: Tirition

Tirition — Fri, 05 Dec 2008 14:08:42 +0000

*blinks in astonishment* Zazo! You do have a heart!